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aquarj
Tiki Socialite
SF bay area, CA
Joined: Apr 02, 2002
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Please don't take any of the following comments as pretending to be an authority, but here are some constructively-intended observations...
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Might wanna try for more of a consistent perspective effect on the sign lettering - if you look closely at the original you'll see the difference. This shows you how the original artist wasn't just sketching, but drafting.
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Since the two tikis are a big part of the identity, take another look at their shapes and mass. The roundness of the tongue and where it meets the chest, the shape of the breastplate and chest cavity, the curvature at the bottom corner of the mouth, the size and shape of noseholes, the curves on the legs, and the subtle jaunty angle that the tiki bases have in the original.
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The empty space under the roofline between the two rock walls is a key part of the googie look.
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The roof on the far right building seems to have less overhang than the original, especially as rendered in the corner pointing toward the viewer. That corner of the building seems to be positioned different in the original.
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Nice job on the Tropicana lettering. Might make the C just a teeny bit more concave at the points.
BTW, I'd agree this makes sense in Creating.
-Randy
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