How Should We Celebrate Tiki Central's 20th Anniversary? - General Tiki

H Hamo Grand Member (3 years) Colorado (via Iowa) Joined: Aug 22, 2016 Posts: 2068	H Hamo Posted posted on Thu, Nov 14, 2019 8:13 PM THIS IS MAGNIFICENT! Mike is right about all those corrections (including the apostrophe in 'its'), plus I think it should be changed to "The main ceremonial gathering house for those who celebrate..." (changing from "a" and omitting "created"). And I'm partial to the tikicentral.org address myself, but that's pretty minor. Also, as an amateur poet who believes line breaks are important, I think the following lines should be: Tiki Central has been your online ohana 24 hours a day since January 2000 ...and... Explore Tiki Central free today or join free to contribute to a 16,000+ strong ohana Great work, tobunga and PineappleWhip!

THIS IS MAGNIFICENT!

Mike is right about all those corrections (including the apostrophe in 'its'), plus I think it should be changed to "The main ceremonial gathering house for those who celebrate..." (changing from "a" and omitting "created"). And I'm partial to the tikicentral.org address myself, but that's pretty minor.

Also, as an amateur poet who believes line breaks are important, I think the following lines should be:

Tiki Central
has been your online ohana
24 hours a day
since January 2000

...and...

Explore Tiki Central free today
or join free to contribute
to a 16,000+ strong ohana

Great work, tobunga and PineappleWhip!

Post #798634 by Hamo on Thu, Nov 14, 2019 8:13 PM